guts and garters
It's all fun and games until someone loses molecular cohesion.
Friday, September 10, 2004
Original sentence: Something aroused him and he surged erect, eyes wide open.
Ahem?
Suggested alteration: Something roused him and he surged to his feet, eyes wide open.
The delicate art of editing in action!
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